Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is commonly argued by some that, in
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recent
years
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people
have
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significant number of options. I totally agree with
this
statement because
,
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in the modern world there are too many
types
of food and entertainment
choices
available.
First
of all, in the modern
age
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a significant number of food
types
are reachable thanks to agricultural advancements and
develepments
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developments
development
in
transportation
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sector. The farming industry has developed especially in the
last
decade with the innovations in genetics, and agricultural products became more resistant to different weather conditions.
As a
result
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different
types
of vegetables or fruits are grown in every season.
For example
,
people
can find strawberries in every market even in winter.
Furthermore
, with the help of
huge
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transportation web around the
world
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even epidemic fruits limited in a small part of the world can be found in distant areas.
For instance
,
however
, there
is
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no mango farms in Turkey,
people
can find it in big groceries.
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important sector that provides
tremendous
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number of
choices
to customers is
entertainment
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the entertainment
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sector, with the help of
internet
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the internet
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and social media.
Invention
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of
internet
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the internet
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expanded
people
's
choices
in all
types
of art
,
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because
people
can easily access the electronic version of music or book which gives them many options.
For instance
, in the past,
people
in Turkey had to wait at least two months to find a copy of an American writer's new novel.
However
, today you can easily access
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in
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the release day on
internet
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.
Secondly
, social media is another significant factor that created different art options, because it is a platform that allows amateurs to share their music or movies directly with their audience, and
this
also
creates many
choices
.
For example
, on
YouTube
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there are millions of amateur musicians you can listen
.
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In conclusion, I fully agree that
,
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today
people
have much more
choices
than ever before especially in
food
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and entertainment sectors.
This
is mainly because of technological and scientific advancement in both of those sectors.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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