Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is commonly argued by some that, in
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significant number of options. I totally agree with
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statement because
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in the modern world there are too many
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of food and entertainment
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available.
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of all, in the modern
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a significant number of food
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are reachable thanks to agricultural advancements and
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developments
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sector. The farming industry has developed especially in the
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decade with the innovations in genetics, and agricultural products became more resistant to different weather conditions.
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different
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of vegetables or fruits are grown in every season.
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can find strawberries in every market even in winter.
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, with the help of
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transportation web around the
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even epidemic fruits limited in a small part of the world can be found in distant areas.
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no mango farms in Turkey,
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can find it in big groceries.
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important sector that provides
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number of
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to customers is
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the entertainment
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sector, with the help of
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the internet
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and social media.
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of
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expanded
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in all
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of art
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because
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can easily access the electronic version of music or book which gives them many options.
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, in the past,
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in Turkey had to wait at least two months to find a copy of an American writer's new novel.
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, today you can easily access
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the release day on
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the internet
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.
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, social media is another significant factor that created different art options, because it is a platform that allows amateurs to share their music or movies directly with their audience, and
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creates many
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.
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, on
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there are millions of amateur musicians you can listen
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In conclusion, I fully agree that
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today
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have much more
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than ever before especially in
food
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the food
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and entertainment sectors.
This
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is mainly because of technological and scientific advancement in both of those sectors.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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