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Nowadays, television is an essential part of our lives, as a medium to spread news and awareness, and, for some, it even acts as a companion. What is your opinion about this?

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There is no denying the fact that watching
television
 is a vital part of one's daily routine.
Timing
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 and purpose of viewing
migh
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might
 differ but
people
 spend a reasonable portion of their time watching it. In the past, other than radio, it was the only
source
 of entertainment and
news
 for
people
 across the world and even today, its significance has not reduced drastically. National governments across the world use
television
 to
dis-seminate
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disseminate
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 information among
masses
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the masses
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 regarding various programmes like healthcare, income taxes etc. Political parties use it for their election campaigns as well.
In addition
 to
this
,
Televesion
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Television
 is still the best and
easily
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most easily
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 accessible
source
 of
news
.
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Availability
Availabilty
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The availabilty
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 of the
news
 content in regional languages has increased its utility even more.
Furthermore
, many companies use
television
 to market their products and services via
television
. In fact, advertising is the major
source
 of revenue for TV channels. Some
people
uses
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use
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television
 quite extensively and spend a significant time watching movies,
news
 etc on it.
Specially
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, those who live alone or are retired. It is like having a constant companion around them or something to look forward to.
However
, pro-longed
televison
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television
 viewing might have negative effects on one's mental well-being and should be moderated. Overall,
Television
 is and probably will remain
popular
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a popular
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source
 of entertainment and
news
 in future too, but
people
 should learn to control the amount of time they spend on TV for a better balance in life.
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