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The below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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The line chart illustrates the
number
 of inquiries sent to the Tourist Information Office in a particular city via three means of communication, between January and
June
 in 2011. It is clear that visitors to the city made more inquires in
person
 and via
telephone
, while written letters and
emails
 became the least common choices.
Additionally
, the
number
 of enquiries in
person
 experienced the most dramatic change among the different options. In January, the Tourist Information Office received 900
telephone
 enquiries, while just under 800 letters and
emails
 were received. Not many tourists chose to ask for information in
person
, with just over 400 queries. Over the
next
 three months, the
telephone
 still remained the most popular method of enquiry,
at
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 approximately 1000 queries. Meanwhile, the
number
 of
enquires
 made in
person
 saw considerable growth to 800, surpassing the figures for
emails
 and postal
enquires
. From March to
June
,
enquires
 in
person
 were the most common method of inquiry. By
June
, the
number
 of
in
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person
enquires
 soared by more than 1,000 to peak at 1,900. During
this
 period, there was
also
 a significant rise in the figure for
telephone
 enquiries, from 1000 to 1600.
By contrast
, fewer people sent
emails
 or letters to make
enquires
, with slightly less than 400
enquires
 in May and
June
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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