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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Even though there is a popular agreement that
technology
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 has made kids less creative than they were in the past, I have a different opinion. I definitely agree with
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. I feel
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 way for two reasons, which I will explore
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in the following essay.
To begin
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 with, nowadays, In
this
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 modern life,
technology
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 is a part of people's lives which helps people to have comfortable lives. A lot of populations
in
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 a variety of ages use the benefits of
technology
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 in many ways. My personal experience is a compelling example of
this
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. About 10 years ago, while I was a kid. I watched the television program that there
were
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 a competition of kids about
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. Some of them showed the audience how to use the
technology
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 for helping the animal sleep. The
winner
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 team was a group of students in high school. They built a robot
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 was able to serve food for
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the customer
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customer
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customers
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.
This
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 was very interesting and creative
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how come they brainstorm their idea. If I was a kid, I would
created
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 a personal robot to clean my house.
As a result
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,
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 is helping
children
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 to grow smarter and it has a positive impact on people's interpersonal skills. Another obvious reason
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is that
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the
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children
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 are smarter than we think.
Children
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 are using
technology
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 in order to get their homework done without going to the library like my generation. During
pandemic
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a pandemic
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, a number of schools started taking classes at home so that the
children
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 do not need to commute to school plus they are able to avoid traffic in the morning. A number of kids are able to access
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the zoom class by themself.
For instance
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, when I was a babysitter, I had to take care of 8 years old
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had classes during the day. When a class was coming, he was able to access the system by himself without asking
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for any
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 helps from me. If I was a kid, I would
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 my parents so many questions until I can access the classroom.
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,
technology
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 is not making the
children
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to
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grow maturer, It
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also
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is also
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 directly related to brilliant decisions makers. In conclusion, for all the reasons stated above, I encourage all
children
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use
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 the benefits of
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 to create
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 enormous project. If they do
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,
then
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 they will discover for themselves that
technology
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 has a countless number of
technology
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 benefits.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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