An increasing number of professional such as doctor and teacher are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. what problem does this cause ? what can be done to deal with this situation ?
A large number of physicians and educators are migrating to developed nations for work, and they are leaving their own poor
countries
. This
trend would cause some serious problems for poor people
, such
as being deprived of education and the medical system. These problems can tackle
by increasing Wrong verb form
be tackled
more jobs
opportunities and Fix the agreement mistake
job
wages
for teachers
and doctors.
To start with, this
migration will reduce the healthcare system in poorer countries
. This
is because when doctors leave their own country, it will cause to reduce
Replace the word
reduction
medical
staff. Change preposition
in medical
Therefore
, only wealthy people
can be accessed
healthcare services at one time. Wrong verb form
access
For example
, as per a survey conducted by the
India magazine in 2016, medical service is so expensive in India that only 20% of the Indian population can afford medical facilities. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, in under-developed countries
, there are minimal resources for education. If the teachers
move to developed nations, there would be no option for poor people
to get an education. As a consequence
, the poor will become poorer, and the rich will become richer, which is dangerous for democracy.
To deal with these challenges, the government has many options. Firstly
, the government should increase the wages
for teachers
who are not only beneficial for a
country but Correct article usage
the
also
helps
in developing Correct subject-verb agreement
help
nation's
economy. Correct article usage
the nation's
For instance
, an article was
written by Benjamin Bradlee, a chief editor of the Washington Post, states that there are many under-developed Unnecessary verb
apply
countries
where teachers
' wages
are less than an ordinary shopkeeper's. Moreover
, the government should make an infrastructure where they can create more job opportunities. Because of this
, The professionals will not rely on other wealthy countries
for their jobs.
To conclude
, if more and more people
migrate to other countries
, life would be really tough for poorer people
. Good job opportunities and high wages
are the only solutions to these problems.Submitted by sonysondh on
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