Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that whether sharing the
information
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from scientific research, business and the academic
world
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were a proper way or hiding
those precious knowledge
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confidentially were be much
more safe
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. In
this
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essay, I will discuss both
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views and give my own perspective.
First
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and foremost, owing to the contribution of ancestors, our lives are getting better and
bether
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better
. All of the
advancement
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are from the
heritagous
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heritage
knowledge and experiences
came
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that came
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from the past.
Advent
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The advent
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of
information
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from science and business made a big step for the
world
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. Without sharing
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the
explosures
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exposures
exposure
,
human
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a human
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being
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couldn't make the
world
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turn. To take the discovery of
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gravity as an example, if there were no instructor generously sharing the insight of the discovery and were no later feedbacks and reflections showed by the others , there probably were no integrating knowledge that people can be educated nowadays.
On the other hand
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, there are some exceptions. Some
information
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involved
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political
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in political
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issues and
domestical
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domestic
safety aren't suitable to share.
For instance
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,
the
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north
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Korea
are
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devoloping
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developing
the nuclear bomb, they might not be able to reveal the progress and procedure they are going through because they might not want other countries
get
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the research they get.
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, people might not want to share the discovery of the diamond halls from Africa, because it might cause some
unevitable
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inevitable
invasion. In conclusion, in my point of view,
although
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it is positive to share valuable
information
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for progress to the
world
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, there are still some sensitive
information
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should
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that should
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be
hiden
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hidden
to remain a peaceful society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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