Nowadays, distance-learning have gained in popularity, but some people argue that courses can never be as good as those taken by attending a college or university in person.To what extent do you agree or disagree

There is a trend that more and more colleges and universities adopt distance-learning programs recently. Especially some written materials, videos, televised and the Internet involved in
this
approach. My opinion is that studying online can not deliver as much academic effect as studying on
campus
. More failures
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academic performance and lack of interesting
campus
life
can prove
this
point. As we all know, even some
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college or university
students
may choose to skip the course if they have
no
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much interest in it.
This
situation will be more often when the courses were given online.
For instance
,
students
' attention may be
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by video games, lovely
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, fantastic music etc. All of those factors may lead to
students
' poor performance in the examination that
further
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increasing level of
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rate.
Thus
,
distance-learning
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isn't as effective as attending school on
campus
.
On the other hand
, high school
students
need a large deal of interaction with their professors and classmates.
Also
, attending online courses at home can not be access to
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facilities
on
campus
, the source of library, student recreation
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, student gym and some other essential things which can only be
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accessible
at school. It is
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that youngsters can not enjoy that interesting
campus
life
just sitting in
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front of the computer.
Hence
, it is impossible for
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to replace studying on
campus
. In conclusion, most adolescents prefer to
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class on
campus
than
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the online course at home because they take
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priority to
campus
life
and
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academic performance.
Although
the online courses are necessary during the period of
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epidemic
covid-19. Hopefully,
this
hard time will end soon and
students
can go back to
campus
to enjoy their interesting
campus
life
.
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