University education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often thought that higher
education
supposes
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to be free access for all adults. I completely disagree with the statement because it can be a strain on the
government
and will impact to country's economy. On the one hand, everyone may agree that investment in
education
is a way of promoting our living standards. As an individual concern, if you are a graduate person, you will have more chances to get job opportunities. Some misfortune people need
government
support to become a graduate person.
Therefore
, as a duty of
nation
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authority, every access to university
education
fees should be free for all
students
regardless of
people's
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their
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status.
For instance
, in Finland, the
government
encourages free
education
.
Thus
, most Finnish people are
well educated
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.
On the other hand
, free
education
may impact to country's economy indirectly especially, for those undeveloped countries. Those expenses on
education
can be used for other important sectors
instead
such
as public health. Another fact is that
students
may not focus on their studies because everyone can easily join
university
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without any personal
efforts
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effort
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produced
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.
This
may reduce
students
' academic skills in the long run.
Additionally
, most of the universities
own
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very much
experience
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and professional teachers and they need to pay for their salaries. Without any funds, famous universities cannot stand for long. It
becomes
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a disaster for the
education
industry. In conclusion, for some
educations
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education
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,
students
should pay for their studies. It
is
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a good effect
for
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both
government
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the government
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and
individual
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individuals
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.
Otherwise
, it will be a burden for the nation and
education
standards will be lower.
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