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It is as important to teach children to protect the environment as it is to teach them to read and write. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 there is no doubt that it is essential to teach children how to save the environment, I think it does not have the same importance as teaching them how to read and write.
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 is because reading and writing skills are vital for their brain development and at that young age, they can not be responsible for environmental protection. in
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 skills are the basic knowledge that the offspring should be taught especially at that early stage of their life. As those skills help them to learn about everything else like Science, Maths, Geography and other topics.
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 example, If the child learns reading and writing, he can not just only easily communicate with others but
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 express himself in a better way as he will be well-educated.
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, recent research shows that the infant's brain has a wider capacity to learn new things than adults.
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, I suppose that teaching
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children to protect the environment is impracticable because they can not
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 responsible for
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, If infants accomplished acquiring those essential language techniques, they would be able to read articles about keeping the surrounding areas clean.
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, being capable to read and write benefits the offspring
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 has an insurmountable effect on society.
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, I completely disagree that learning about saving the surroundings is not as necessary as knowing about reading and writing at the beginning of the child's education stage. To illustrate it is too early and language lessons are way important, So these children will be highly educated when they grown-up.

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Your response does not fully address the prompt. It is important to clearly state your opinion on whether teaching children to protect the environment is as important as teaching them to read and write, and provide reasons to support your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear structure and connection between ideas. Make sure to organize your ideas logically with clear topic sentences for each paragraph.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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