Some believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Education is important for everyone ,especially in the era of globalization . The few individuals think that the amount we spend on innovated technology
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is better than on
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would discuss both views and give my opinion. On the one hand,technology
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as computers
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much effective in modern life. If you want to know any information,you just turn on your computer and look up all the
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you need .
For example
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at home,sometimes you need to learn vocabulary and communication on your own. So you can access many dictionaries,websites as well as
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pronunciation video on Youtube.
In addition
, many apps are designed to share knowledge not only with
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kid but
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the other hand,
teachers
are always considered as the important leader to the students. While parents are a child's
first
teachers
,school
teachers
are
also
very significant to the child’s knowledge base.
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a great deal of experience in the teaching
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some knowledge that students can not learn from the internet
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as life skills and
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Last
but not least,the feeling of the students when they study and interact with their
teachers
is more emotional than just sitting in front of the computer screen. To conclude,after considering the great merits between better computers and better
teachers
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money on
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teacher
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instead
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computer devices.
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