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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or waste of time?

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Nowadays, many high school
students
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 like taking a break to
travel
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 or
work
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 in companies before going to university. I think taking a
gap
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year
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 is a good idea, and
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 essay will explain why it is a good choice. One of the many reasons is that
students
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 could enrich their life and social experience through a
gap
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year
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. When
students
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work
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 in companies, they would be taught many skills and gain much professional knowledge about an industry.
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, high school graduates could develop their social skills when working in a company since they get along with mature people like customers, colleagues and managers every day. In
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 way, they will become more independent and mature than other
students
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 who do not have any
work
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 experience. Another main reason is, young adults could improve their sense of independence when they take a
gap
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year
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 to
travel
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 by themselves. They would learn how to make a preparation, manage their time and make plans for different
travel
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 places during the trip.
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, when a young adult do a long car trip, they will do many things by themselves; and when they meet
difficulities
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difficulties
 on the road
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 as a traffic jam and bad weather, they would deal with them by themselves.
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, they will become more independent than always stayed with their parents in the past as they can solve many things without any help. In conclusion, taking a
gap
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year
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 to have a trip or get a job brings many advantages to young people, like improving their
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work ability
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workability
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 and learning many practical skills.
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, taking a
gap
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year
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 to
travel
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 makes young adults more independent and mature.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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