Behavior in school getting worse. Explain the cause of problem

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In a decade the teenager’s
behaviors
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are getting worse as
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to the previous decades.
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challenges
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causes
culture
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values
declining
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to decline
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and
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hurdling in
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good
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society
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development. In
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essay, we will discuss the
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and possible
solution
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that can overcome the problem. There are two main
problems
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that
playing
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a vital role
in
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inappropriate
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appropriate
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the appropriate
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behavior
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behaviour
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of
teenagers
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in
schools
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. The
first
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one relates to lack of family time because the parents
spending
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more
times
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time
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on their jobs to cover the family expenses. Due to
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children do not have enough anyone to look after and can guide them about the wrong action and thoughts. Another reason is that
schools
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become more profitable business models
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of a place where the focus should be to develop learners to be part of
the
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society
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and for their
family
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families
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. These two
problems
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have created negatives images on the individual which can lead to a negative personality and aggressive
behavior
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behaviour
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. There are two possible solutions which can over the
problems
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. Guardian / Parents should spend more time with
teenagers
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and share their thoughts, past experiences and norms of their cultures and family.
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Moreover
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the government should improve the
compliances
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compliance
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check on the
schools
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and should evaluate that the
schools
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providing the right academics education to the students and
also
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focusing more on the
behavior
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development of the
teenagers
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.
Behavioral
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Trainings
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can
helps
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teenagers
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to overcome the problem.
These possible solution
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can help us to reduce the challenges which
teenagers
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are facing and their
society
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as well. In conclusion, those discussed
problems
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hammering
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the
society
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and individuals badly. These
problems
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can be overcome by applying the discussed possible solutions that can help the
teenagers
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, so the school environments become more productive and pleasant.
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