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In many countries, wedding are Getting bigger and more expensive than the past. What is the reason for this coma is it positive or negative development

#countries #reason #coma #development
In
this
 modern era,
marriages
 are becoming massive in some nations and
people
 like to spend more
money
 on it as compared to
past
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the past
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. The major cause of expensive wedding is
show
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a show
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of
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off
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.
Although
 it provides employment to
people
coma
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in coma
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 I still believe that
utilise
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utilising
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large
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a large
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 amount of wealth on weddings
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is are
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are
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is
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 wastage of
money
. To comments with, the reason of
allocate
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allocating
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 the ample of
money
 in
marriages
 is
show
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a show
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of
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off
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 to societies.
People
 mostly like to
show
 their status
by
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with
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money
. In that type of
weddings
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wedding
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,
people
 like to display a certain
type
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types
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 of food items are expensive clothes and heavy jewellery.
For example
,
Hindustan
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the Hindustan
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 times newspaper
show
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shows
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 that 42% of
people
 in India like to read expensive
marriages
 in
past
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the past
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 five years. Individuals want to
show
 their wealth to
community
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the community
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 and
loves
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love
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 to
listen
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tolisten
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 good words for them.
Thus
, to
enhances
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enhance
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 the goodwill in society
people
 allocate more
money
in
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to
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 weddings. on the one hand, wedding ceremonies provide an opportunity for
people
 to earn
money
. Humans from lower classes do
different
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a different
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type
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types
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 of
works
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work
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such
 as getting away training and
on the other hand
, it is
negative
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a negative
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 development because
people
 waste their
money
 unnecessary. In
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the past
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past
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,past
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people
 like to do simple
marriages
 and do not waste much
money
 as they know the value of
money
. So rather than
a
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apply
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utilise
this
money
e on
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aeon
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 wedding ceremonies
people
 should save it for future and for the good education of their
children's
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children
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. As a consequence,
plethora
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a plethora
the plethora
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 of
money
waste
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wasted
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 on
marriages
 is not valuable. In conclusion, do expensive
marriages
 provide work to
people
,
however
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,however
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 it was a lot of
money
 of individuals in goodwill is the main cause of bigger
marriages
.
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