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In many countries weddings are getting bigger and more expensive than the past. What are the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development

#countries #weddings #reason #development
In
this
 modern era,
wedding
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weddings
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 are becoming massive in some nations and
public
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the public
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 like to spend more property on
it
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them
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 as compared to the past. The major cause of
expensive
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an expensive
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 wedding is a
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show-off
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show off
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show-off
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.
Although
 it provides employment to
community
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the community
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 in
coma
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a coma
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 I still believe that utilising a large amount of wealth on weddings is
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a wastage
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wastage
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 of
money
. To comments with, the reason of allocating the ample of
money
 in
marriages
 is a
show off
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show-off
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 to societies.
People
 mostly like to
show
 their status with
money
. In that type of wedding,
people
 like to display
a
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certain types of food items are expensive clothes and heavy jewellery.
For example
, the Hindustan
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Times
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times
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time's
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 newspaper shows that 42% of
people
 in India like to read expensive
marriages
 in the past five years. Individuals want to
show
 their wealth to the community and love to
listen
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 good words for them.
Thus
, to
enhances
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enhance
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 the goodwill in society
people
 allocate more
money
in
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 weddings. on the one hand, wedding ceremonies provide an opportunity for
people
 to earn
money
. Humans from lower classes do different types of work
such
 as getting away training and
on the other hand
, it is a negative development because
people
 waste their
money
 unnecessary. In ,
past
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the past
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people
 like to do simple
marriages
 and do not waste much
money
 as they know the value of
money
. So rather than
a
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utilise
this
money
e on
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aeon
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 wedding ceremonies
people
 should save it for future and for the good education of their children. As a consequence, a plethora of
money
 wasted on
marriages
 is not valuable. In conclusion, do expensive
marriages
 provide work to
people
,
,
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however
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 it was a lot of
money
 of individuals in goodwill is the main cause of bigger
marriages
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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