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The continued rise of world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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In the world we live in today, the
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 increased population of the world is a vital issue we are facing. I agree with the statement mentioned because it can cause the demand in
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 rise and able to provide an unbalanced ecosystem. A large
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population may
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 not a bad habit,
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 it may cause
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the nations stress
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 to survive. There can be the pros in
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 census but the cons are much higher; a huge natural resources demands in a huge number in
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 will have
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 in nations profit.
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, it
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 said that it is passed on
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 are the prime suspect for
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 because of accelerating on the budget.
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, the poor nations,
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have a massive demand
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 profit-making and the government cannot deliver properly because of overpopulation.
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, having
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 community population can attain
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 negative effect on
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. Each individual
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responsibility
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 in the cycle of life,
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 as plants and animals, and an
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 in number can have
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adverse ramification on
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.
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, attainment of
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environmental safety may result
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 negative effect,
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, in our rice field, there
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scene
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 that happened
a massive pests
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 in the field and
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 number of rats makes our rice
unvaluable
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invaluable
. In conclusion, I strongly agree that overpopulation causes
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problem
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 because of the economical surge and negative
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 on
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the ecosystem
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.
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