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The picture presents a comparison of the
park
 map in 1980 with the present moment. At
first
 look, a major change in
park
 layout has been observed with significant changes to tree and flower sections on the east
section
 of the
park
. A significant improvement is done in terms of accessing the
park
. In 1980, there were only to entrance to the
park
 which has been
increase
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increasing
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 to four each from all the four directions. On the left
section
, an additional sitting arrangement is incorporated near the pond,
however
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,however
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 the size of the pond remains the same. South of the pond, the flowers area has been reformed into bushes, and a bit wider than
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the pervious
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pervious
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previous
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 area.
On the other hand
, an eye-catching development is observed
to
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in
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the trees place
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the place of the tree
the place of the trees
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. The tree area is
further
 enhanced with chairs, desks, and barbecue.
Additionally
, the flower
section
 in
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south-east
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south
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the south
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 east
section
 is now converted to
playground
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the playground
a playground
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. Overall, the
park
undergone
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underwent
has undergone
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 a major change with respect to structure and accessibility to the
park
.
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