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Poor nutrition and obesity is a problem in many developed countries and some people believe that a tax an fastfood would reduce the problem. Do you agree?

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Unhealthy
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diet
 has caused health problems and weight-related problems in some
first
-world countries.
Although
,
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 often it is said that fast
food
 should be taxed to mitigate the problem, I think taxation alone is not enough and other measures should be taken to lessen detrimental health effects,
such
 as education and promotion of healthy eating.
First
 of all, most people who are regular consumers of fast
food
 are not aware of negative consequences,
such
 as weight gain.
Therefore
, it is essential to inform and educate society on
this
 matter, using educational posters on the
fast
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food
 chains.
As a result
,
public
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the public
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 will become informed about the harmful effects of an unhealthy
diet
 and will try to consume less of it.
Additionally
, local authorities should advertise and advocate nutritious
food
 for children at schools. The Irish government, as an example, rewards children who participate and maintain a healthy
diet
 based on their weight. If students manage to lose weight, they will be rewarded.
Finally
, the availability of fast-
food
 restaurants makes it easy to access these meals. For
this
 reason, it is important to limit the number of
fast
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food
 chains, so that fewer
population
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populations
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 have less access to unhealthy
food
.
For instance
, New Zealand reduced the number of
fast
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food
 restaurants significantly to 1000 in the whole country, which resulted in reducing obesity. In conclusion, taxing alone can not be the final solution for poor
diet
 and other actions,
such
 as informing
community
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the community
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 on
negative
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the negative
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 effects of these kinds of
diet
 and promoting healthy eating using posters and rewards.
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