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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays most of society is using internet access.it is a very huge negative impact on the youngster. I strongly agreed with the primary reason. I think and discuss both views in the essay.
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 of all, currently, a population of the country is addicted to some social network
sites
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 like Facebook, Instagram they are using continuously not communicating with the surrounding
people
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 and family members
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. the connection of the
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 is
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 reducing because they do not communicate with each other
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 to
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 they are conveying by chatting on some social
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. nowadays
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 are spending more time on social
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 even they do not sleep properly
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 facing some health issues.
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, to addict the social
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 they are forgetting feelings,
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, we are seeing in the news most young
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 are addicted to some
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 and games to lose the game their taking suicide. using the internet
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 are interested in being alone.
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, at some point, social
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sites
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 benefit because they connect with far
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 and some of the
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 using for study purposes
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 have to gain information about what they need and they how the world and they can explore anything and making new friends and they can using marketing purpose
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 there benefits have to use social
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. but I strongly agreed that social
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 is negatively affecting our lives. the parents should take the responsibility for not giving gadgets to kids and young
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 they don't allow their privacy and security In conclusion, there are a lot of problems to
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 the
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 by using social
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 they can
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 sleep deprivation and anxiety and lack of emotional connections
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 I strongly agreed it is the very bad impact to use the social network
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