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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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Nowadays most of society is using internet access.it is a very huge negative impact on the youngster. I strongly agreed with the primary reason. I think and discuss both views in the essay.
First
 of all, currently, a population of the country is addicted to some social network
sites
 like Facebook, Instagram they are using continuously not communicating with the surrounding
people
 and family members
also
. the connection of the
people
 is
also
 reducing because they do not communicate with each other
face
 to
face
 they are conveying by chatting on some social
media
. nowadays
people
 are spending more time on social
media
 even they do not sleep properly
also
 facing some health issues.
In addition
, to addict the social
media
 they are forgetting feelings,
for example
, we are seeing in the news most young
people
 are addicted to some
sites
 and games to lose the game their taking suicide. using the internet
people
 are interested in being alone.
Furthermore
, at some point, social
media
sites
 benefit because they connect with far
people
 and some of the
people
 using for study purposes
also
 have to gain information about what they need and they how the world and they can explore anything and making new friends and they can using marketing purpose
also
 there benefits have to use social
sites
. but I strongly agreed that social
media
 is negatively affecting our lives. the parents should take the responsibility for not giving gadgets to kids and young
people
 they don't allow their privacy and security In conclusion, there are a lot of problems to
face
 the
people
 by using social
media
 they can
face
 sleep deprivation and anxiety and lack of emotional connections
also
 I strongly agreed it is the very bad impact to use the social network
sites
.
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