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plastic bags ,plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. what damage does plastic do to the environment? what can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #governments #individuals
Products made out of plastic material
such
 as
bottlles
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bottles
,bags and
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packaging are undeniably harmful
into
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 our environment.
This
 essay will discuss
possible
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 damage it can bring to our environment, and at the same time some appropriate measures a government and
as
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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can do to
to
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address
this
 issue will be outlined
further
.
First
 and foremost, it is true that
majority
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 of the things
people
 used are formed from plastic material because of its low cost and durability.
This
 is alarming as the fact remains that
plastics
 are non-biodegradable and as
people
's
continous
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continuous
 use will lead to a significant and irreversible negative effect
to
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 our ecosystem.
For example
, if
plastics
 are burned
this
 will emit a toxic substance into the air causing ambient air pollution.
In addition
, it
also
 released toxic
substance
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 if
plastics
 are perished under the soil and exposed
in
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 the sunlight. There are ways a government and
as
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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 can do to help solve
this
 ongoing problem.
First
, a law shall be implemented that limiting and
restricting
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restricts
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 the
productions
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production
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 and distribution of single used
plastics
such
 as straws, cups and so on.
Furthermore
, it will be better to encourage
the
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people
 to use
a reusable products
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reusable products
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 like eco-bag for
for
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groceries.
Second
,
community
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 drive program is needed and by having so
people
's awareness will
improved
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 and motivated
to
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 participate.
For instance
, a group of
people
 can be organized to help
collecting
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 the
plastics
 routinely from home and in return credit points is given that can be used for buying food products. To conclude,
use
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 of
plastics
 definitely posed a serious adverse effect to our environment,
however
, with the collaborative effort of a government and
it's
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its
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people
 there are possible ways and actions that can help solve
this
 ongoing problem. l
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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