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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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In today's world, computers, laptops and mobile phones have become crucial in everybody's lives. Few people acknowledge that
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 trend leans towards a positive development, while others argue that it has a negative impact on people's lives.
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 essay will discuss both statements and
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 present a concluding view. On the one hand, using the internet in the right way can benefit any individual as he can communicate via any medium for any purpose, meaning that, an individual who is physically located in a country can communicate with another person through network connectivity and an application required to call.
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, a man can apply for a job interview using email or job application portals online.
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, using digital devices can have damaging effects if they are being misused,
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, social media can consume the valuable time of humans,
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, it is a threat to personal data as it can be leaked.
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, the internet is prone to hacking as there are many hackers waiting to look for an opportunity to attack vulnerable people that are innocent on the net.
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, a news article in the US stated that a common man's bank account details were being hacked and the person went bankrupt after
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 incident because of network flaws. To conclude, taking both perspectives into consideration, I agree that technology has a positive impact if used rightly.
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, one must enjoy the benefits the internet offers while being very cautious to minimize the negative effects of the technology.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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