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plastic bags ,plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. what damage does plastic do to the environment? what can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #governments #individuals
Products
 made out of
plastic
 material
such
 as bottles, bags and packaging are undeniably harmful
into
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 our environment.
This
 essay will discuss
possible
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 damage it can bring to our environment, and at the same time some appropriate measures a government and
as
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individuals can do to
to
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address
this
 issue will be outlined
further
.
First
 and foremost, it is true that the majority of the things
people
 used are formed from
plastic
 material because of its low cost and durability.
This
 is alarming as the fact remains that
plastics
 are non-biodegradable and as
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people
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 continuous use will lead to a significant and irreversible negative effect
to
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 our ecosystem.
For example
, if
plastics
 are burned
this
 will emit toxic substances into the air causing ambient air pollution.
In addition
, it
also
 released toxic substances if
plastics
 are perished under the soil and exposed to the sunlight. There are ways a government and
as
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individuals can do to help solve
this
 ongoing problem.
First
, a law shall be implemented that limits and
restricting
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 the production and distribution of single used
plastics
such
 as straws, cups and so on.
Furthermore
, it will be better to encourage
the
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people
 to use
a reusable
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reusable products
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products
 like eco-bag for
for
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groceries.
Second
,
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community
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 driven program is needed in order to improve
society
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 participation resulting
to
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 better understanding.
For instance
, a group of
people
 can be organized and will be responsible
with
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 the collection of
plastic
products
 from different
household
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 within the community. By doing
such
,
a credit points
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 will be earned that can be used in the future in buying food
products
 for their family. To conclude, the use of
plastic
 definitely posed a serious adverse effect to our environment which is
dtrimental
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detrimental
,
however
,
with
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the collaborative effort of our government and its
people
 by imposing correct strategies and actions will surely
makes
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 a big impact in solving
this
 ongoing issue. l
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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