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In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, future developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Even though
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technology
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 (IT) has been experiencing
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huge progress during the past two decades, some
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 are
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 about the future. They believe IT's negative consequences will outstand the positive in the
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 future. In my opinion, I disagree that
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 discoveries in
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technology
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 will lead to more negative effects than
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. Indeed, IT is still contributing to society's development and its key role will grow in relevance in the
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 decades due to
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 change challenges.
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 of all, not only
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technology
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 has sensibly improved
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's lives in the
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 decades, but it
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 created job places and helps us
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 our knowledge.
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, IT saved our economies during the covid-19 pandemic. Thanks to the World Wide Web, emails and
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people
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 managed to keep working in spite of the lockdowns set by the governments. Computers
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 helped kids and teenagers
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 less alone while confined at home due to the pandemic.
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, by joining zoom calls they were able to participate in classes and
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 exams remotely, or simply talk to their friends. In the
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 years, IT's role will become more and more essential in our lives. As humanity, we need strong allies,
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 as machines to face the effects of the global
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 crisis. As a matter of fact,
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 could be leveraged as a powerful tool to inform
people
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 about
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 change causes and solutions.
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medias
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 could be used as a main source of
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 for new generations. To conclude, there are no reasons for worrying about IT's side effects, since until now it only improved our society.
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, to win the battle against
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 change, we do not need to consider
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 as an enemy, but as an ally.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • World Wide Web
  • electronic communication
  • advancement
  • privacy breach
  • cybersecurity
  • automation
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • job displacement
  • electronic waste
  • sustainability
  • connectivity
  • efficiency
  • innovation
  • global economy
  • over-reliance
  • public distrust
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