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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. 250 Words Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

#salary #job #satisfaction
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Many People claims that high remuneration is more advantageous in comparison to
appropriate
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 working environment despite lack of
satisfaction
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 with their
job
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 I firmly disagree with that statement of
essay
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the essay
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. I strongly believe that
working
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the working
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 atmosphere and
job
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 routine should be relaxed and not hectic
also
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 align with the
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person
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person's
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 ability
instead
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 of pay that may lead some mental illness to a
person
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.
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 of
all
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 it is worth considering high pay
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its
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it
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 bring bread and butter for living
however
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job
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satisfaction
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 should be on top of priority that a
person
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 carrying a
job
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 should be overjoy with their work and do not compromise their comfort zone and
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 spend quality times with their family and kids. Many
researcher
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researchers
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 claims that
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job
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a job
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 carrier should be parallel to a
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person
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person's
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 capacity that enables a
person
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 to carry
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job
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a job
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 in
longer
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a longer
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 perspective
that is
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 not beneficial only for a
person
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also
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 for the company.
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Secondly
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,Secondly
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 there is a correlation
with
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between
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job
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satisfaction
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 and productivity of work. It
is motivate
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motivates
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 you and
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 provide
a
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apply
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carrier growth. A
person
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 who loves their
job
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 can easily excel in their fields of work and achieve better results as compared to those whose
first
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 priority is high wage.
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Instance
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 Sir Amjad was working for a company with a high salary package but he had to compromise
a
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plenty of things to
carrying
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carry
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 their
job
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 he decided to leave it and later on he became
successful
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a successful
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 entrepreneur and run their own business progressively. To sum
up
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,up
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 high salary package might bring sudden happiness
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 prosperous thing should be
job
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satisfaction
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that is
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 over and above than high wage
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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