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The cost of flying has decreased significantly over the last decade. This has made overseas travel much more accessible. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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Travelling by air is the quickest way to travel from one country to another. Over the
last
decade
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 the price of an airline ticket has significantly reduced, which allows travelling to different countries more accessible for a lot of
people
. In
this
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 I will discuss two
advantages
 and disadvantages of
this
 trend. The decrease in the
cost
 of flying has two major
advantages
.
Firstly
, the service will be accessible for a wide range of
people
, including middle and
low class
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people
. Budget airlines,
for example
, are very cheap and it is affordable
by
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 almost everyone.
Secondly
, the low
cost
 of flying will allow more businesses to expand as well as more students would fly abroad to achieve
their
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 goals that they deserve without worrying about the
cost
 of an
airplane
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aeroplane
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 ticket.
However
, all these
advantages
 come hand in hand with their disadvantages. When overseas travel become easily accessible to everyone, the availability of
this
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these
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 services reduces.
For example
, when tickets are sold out,
people
 will have to wait for another day to fly.
This
 leads me to my
second
 point. To compensate for the reduction in availability, airlines buy more
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 and more fuel to keep their businesses running.
Burning
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The burning
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 of these extra fuels adds
on
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to the carbon emission, which can lead to global warming. In conclusion, the significant decrease in the
cost
 of flying has allowed a wide range of
people
 to travel, but at the same time leads to
increase
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 in demand, and has an effect on the
enviornment
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environment
. In my opinion, there are more
advantages
for
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 the reduction in the prices of flights compared to the disadvantages.
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