You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter -describe the problem with the equipment -explain how this problem is affecting your work -say what you want the shop or company to do

#work #home #piece #equipment #job #shop #company #-describe #-explain #-say

Dear sir, I am writing

this

letter to inform you that I brought a new Asus company laptop from your shop three weeks before which cost 20000 rupees. I

purchases

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this

computer because I am working online due to

this

covid

senario

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scenario

and internet is mandatory for my

work

. The device which I got

have

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a problem with wifi connection. It sometimes will get

conected

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connected

but sometime it will not detect wifi connection. As the system is not getting connected, my

work

get

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choked. As I said, sometime it will show network ,but it will automatically

disconnected

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be disconnected

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within half an hour.

Hence

work

get

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delayed so many email verifications are pending. My customers are

complaning

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complaining

to higher authorities about my delay in their queries.

However

this

laptop is still under

warrenty

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warranty

period and please take

this

system back and replace with a new one as soon as possible. Since I need

laptop

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for my

work

, it is an emergency need for me I am looking forward

for

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a positive reply from you. Thanking you yours faithfully Neethi Martin

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 8.0

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