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Write about the following topic: Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Public servants play a crucial role in the development of any nation. It is always expected that permanent government employees must offer some services at no cost as a payback gesture to society.
This
 essay will discuss why a little contribution of
work
 from, them is always helpful to the nation's development. There are many reasons for
such
 expectations. The major one is,
these personnel
Change the determiner
this personnel
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 know how the systems
work
. They can reduce the burden of the general public by simplifying the process that lay people find complicated in accessing the services.
For instance
, My friend's father who is a lab assistant, and
also
 possesses
knowledge
 about the hospital infrastructure guides the patients to the respective departmental doctors in the out-patient department of the hospital during his after hours of
work
.
Such
 contributions enable smooth access to services for the citizens.
In addition
, voluntary
work
 performed in other fields gives them adequate
knowledge
 about different areas. It not only eases the
work
 but
also
, enhances the skills of these staff which is beneficial to them and society as well.
Such
 as school teachers who participate in National immunization programs shares
knowledge
 about the disease conditions and the importance of vaccines in our lives.
This
 will help them educate their students and society about the benefits of vaccination. In conclusion, working for the public free of cost will not only eases the government's functionality but
also
, provides them with great
knowledge
 about various topics.
Therefore
, it is reasonable for expecting permanent government employees to do some voluntary
work
 to return something to the community.
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