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The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays a lot of
citizens
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 the governments should give them a salary in order to develop their life independently if they are working or not. To that
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 I am totally in agreement due to the following reasons. As we all know, there are a lot of
citizens
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 who did not have the same opportunity to study or
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, to develop their career and in consequence, for them is quite difficult to find a decent job in order to receive a good salary. A monthly salary could help people to rent a flat or an apartment and
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, the number of homeless people will decrease. Another point to consider is the movement of the economy. It means that the more
money
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 the
citizens
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 have, the fastest the economy will move. More specifically, if a huge percentage of
citizens
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 have the possibility to spend their
money
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 the economic situation will be improved.
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, is remarkable the improvements that could have in the health area, it means that people with
money
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 to spend in pharmacy, will not collapse hospitals and GPs and in consequence, they will not consume public resources. It could be a good way to give
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money
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 to governments back. To resume my opinion, I believe that a monthly income to
citizens
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 independently if they have a job or not could lead a lot of benefits to them and at the same time, to the society. Since politicians win the elections they have a compromise with their
citizens
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 because their salaries come from
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 and
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 their responsibility to take care
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 them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic income
  • financial security
  • unemployed
  • poverty
  • support
  • discourage
  • economic growth
  • taxes
  • budgetary strain
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