In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In some countries, it is essential for people to have their own
home
instead
of renting one. I totally agree with that state of mind and in
this
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I am going to describe the reasons why. Owning your
home
makes you feel safer. You know that you do not have a contract that at the end of it you'll have to find another
home
to stay
.
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Even if you took a loan for buying
this
home
, you know that you are paying for something yours. For me, getting your own house is a huge achievement, because that means that you worked hard to realise a dream.
Furthermore
, not having to pay
a
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rent means that you can save more, in order to realise another dream of yours,
such
as opening a business or buying a car. According to researchers, we spend almost 52% of our income only
at
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renting. So, by saving
this
you can even buy another
home
quicklier
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quickly
. The only negative thing I could imagine in
this
situation is that it could be harder to find something to rent if all own a property, it would be difficult for a new resident to find something to rent.
Also
, not having the ownership of a house means that you do not have to worry about loans, mortgages, market crashes or even if a natural disaster occurs to your
home
. In conclusion, ownership of a
home
is a really positive matter, but not for all. A person should take into account all the benefits and the disadvantages that
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such
an expensive purchase
like
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a
home
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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