Some people want government to spend money on searching for life on other planets. However, others think it is a waste of public money when the earth has so many problems. Discuss these two views and give your own opinion.

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, more and more governments start to invest
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area: explore whether other
life
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or not
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other planets. Some
people
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this
proposal, while others argue that it is
waste
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of the
taxation
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they paid since there are more serious issues
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to address. In my opinion, I agree with that using public money should
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spend on current problems rather than finding new
life
. From
people
who think it is necessary to search for
life
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other planets’
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, it is generally accepted that
human
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would run out of resources on the earth one day, so finding a new place as a backup is essential. And if authorities could find
life
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other parts of the universe, the fact
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that human
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another option to move to.
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, it is a way to prevent
people
from the
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of
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unknown creatures. As the assumption that
people
are considered by other
life
as lower animals, taking acts
first
could be a protection for
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.
On the contrary
, others claim that
instead
of spending public money on searching for
life
on other planets, authorities should pay more attention to other fields, and improve those
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to solve the
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higher priority issues,
such
as educational and medicinal
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. To cite an example as education, having more governments' financial support can make those
illiteracy
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people
become more affordable to get the higher education and find a job to meet their ends.
Moreover
, if they invest
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medicine, like
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more medical machines and
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professional
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to carry out more research on those diseases that can not solve by present technical, like cancer, can increase the percentage of
people
have well-being and
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decease
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the mortality rate. In conclusion, I reiterate my belief that governments should spend money on issues that
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under
people
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noses at present, rather than giving funds to a proposal that may take a long time to
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its merits.
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