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You have a suggestion for a park nearby where you live. Write a letter to your city’s council. In your letter include: what your suggestion is why you think this suggestion will improve the park when you would like to see this suggestion in action

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 letter to bring your eye to the betterment of the place near my stay. As per my ,oversight I would like to pen down a few important suggestions. Allow me to elaborate. We all know that the public point in our society named as Willsdown is beautiful as well as spread in a wide span of the area due to which we are facing some issues like uneven gathering in the estate, pupils with their dogs are visiting the place by which it looks like dirty and messed up.
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 am with some of my opinions
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, I would request you to issue the member pass to access the place visitors so that access to the part will be limited which result in the atmosphere of the park .
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, gathering with dogs and animals should take care of the animal and are responsible for each and every action done by their pets from cleaning the poop of the dog to putting them in control.
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 types of concerns will improve the hygiene and the beauty will not deteriorate. The visitor will feel safe and secure as dogs will be in control of their owners and decorum should be maintained. As per my ,
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 these actions shall be taken on an immediate basis and should not delay more than a week as it will not make major changes in the park and the assiduity of the park.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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