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Your friend has been offered a palce on course at the university where you studied. She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

#friend #palce #course #university #advice #place
Dear
komal
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Komal
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, I'm writing
this
 email to you,
advicing
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advising
 what place should be the best for you to reside as you mentioned the same university where I used to study a few months back.
Firstly
, I would like to state about my
accomodation
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accommodation
, I used to reside on Nelson street which is a street across the University, it was a detached house where all the faculties were included but my landlord would never let me use the kitchen though it was included within the rent. I was very disappointed as it was not a quiet atmosphere for a student. 
At
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 the end, I would suggest you
that
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apply
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do not make the same mistake which I committed, for a
student
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 the best
accomodation
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accommodation
 is
university
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a university
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 hostel which is full of other students and you could actually get
the
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help for your assignments from the other students studying the same course.  I hope everyone is doing well in your family. All the best. Karina.
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