In some countires, many young people choose to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting universitiy studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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is changing,
people
are
also
trying to explore different ways to make their lives better and to understand the real purpose of their lives.
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of following the standard practices
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other
people
follow
such
as finishing
the
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high
school
and
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directly to
university
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the university
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for
further
studies
however
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, there are some
advatages
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advantages
of not
to follow
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the standard timeline but it
also
comes with some disadvantages. As
world
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the world
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is evolving quite fast,
people
can take out some time from their regular studies to explore the possibilities around them and it is only possible if they get a chance to travel as travelling is the best way to learn new
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things
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quickly and it helps human being to think broader without any boundaries.
For example
, after High
school
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,school
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if
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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is getting a chance to visit other countries, they will get a chance to know about different cultures, meet different
people
which may help them to decide what they want to study in future as well as
working
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after high
school
can
also
give
a
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really good and practical exposure to them. Working after high
school
can help students to generate
the
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a
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sense of
responsibilty
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responsibility
,
importance
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the importance
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of money, improve communication skills and it
also
gives an opportunity to look
the
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world
from
the
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broader
prespective
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perspective
.
Thus
, travelling and work can give exposure which a person can never get by studying.
furthermore
, there are
also
some disadvantages
such
as, in the
fast paced
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world
if the students are taking
gap
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a gap
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year it might affect their
addmission
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admission
process as the study break might be considered that the student is
incompetant
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incompetent
.
also
, as soon as
people
finish their studies they can get
the
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good job and can live independently at
their
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early
ages
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age
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. In conclusion, It is always a good idea to take a break and explore the opportunities by travelling or working but one should not take a longer break which might make things more complicated while taking
addmission
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admission
to the universities.
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