Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Even though there is a popular agreement that playing
computer
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games
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is a waste of
time
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,
children
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should not be allowed to play them, I have a different opinion. I totally believe that playing
computer
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games
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is getting more benefits rather than wasting of
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. I feel
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way for two
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, which I will explore
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this
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in the following essay.
To begin
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with, In
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modern life, technology plays a huge part
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people's lives. It helps people to have comfortable lives.
Children
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are using the benefits from technology which make them grow smarter.
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,
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allows the kids to use their strategic planning and thinking and enhance as well. Some of them choose the learn from
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. My personal experience is a compelling example of
this
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. About 10 years ago when I was a kid. I played a lot of
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games
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such
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as driving a car in a game.
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affected
to
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me while I took a
driver
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license test in reality. I was able to use all of my skills from
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,
as a
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result
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I passed my
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license test on my
first
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tried
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.
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, If I had not played
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, I would not be able to
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my driving test on my
first
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tried
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.
Therefore
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, playing
computer
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games
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has a positive impact on
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people’s
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interpersonal skills. Another obvious reason is
because
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playing
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will help
children
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to improve their communication skills and
making
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new
friends
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from
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that they will be able to strengthen bonds among other people.
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, when I was a kid, I really like to play
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name
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'DOTA' I was a leader ,so I needed to
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to
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my team.
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, I have made a lot of
friends
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from that
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. We became
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friends
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in reality
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we would be able to share our emotions and feelings.
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, If I had not started playing
games
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, I would not have
make
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new
friends
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.
Hence
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, playing
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is not only beneficial communication
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but
also
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expanding
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their social circle. In conclusion, for all reasons stated above, I encourage all
children
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to
playing
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games
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and limit
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their
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time
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. If they do
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then
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they will discover for themselves that playing
games
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is more beneficial rather than wasting
of
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apply
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time
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.

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