Nowadays , many people spend less and less time at home .What are the causes of this? what are the effects of this on individual and society?
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more time out than at Wrong verb form
spending
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Furthermore
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Another problem that needs to be considered is that nowadays even those who live in a city or in the countryside have to work to afford to feed their family and pay their bills Linking Words
such
as electricity, Internet, food, and others. Linking Words
For example
, In ,general many are spending at least 6 hours at the workplace plus a couple of hours on the way in and out. Linking Words
In addition
to that, we have a rising number of unemployed
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the
individuals who do not have a successful career there are tended to develop serious drawbacks to their capacity Correct determiner usage
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,
the
number of people Correct article usage
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developed
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such
as high blood pressure, diabetes, anxiety, anguish and countless different types.
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To sum up
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subject which I believe that we should try to find a balance between work and Linking Words
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living our lives. Change preposition
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Nevertheless
, our government should provide more benefits to the community to treat mental problems and health issues.Linking Words
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