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Technology has made man more social or less social Discuss both views and give opinion

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In today's ,world new innovations bring various changes in human life but some of them have positive effects or some have negative.
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 made man more social or less social. In
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 I will discuss both views and
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 provide my opinion in upcoming paragraphs. As man is a social animal. With the help of ,
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 they become
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more social
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 by using various applications on their mobile
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 like Facebook, Instagram and Whatsapp through which they can make
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 with any
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 who is living in their own country or foreign nations. They can send messages, images, videos to them. They can
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 call them when they want or in case of any emergency.
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 was printed in 2021, in the newspaper "The Tribune" which provides the information about nowadays
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 are more social than before with the invent of new technologies. They spend most of their time on social applications.
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, some
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less social
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 because
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 innovations help them to do all the activities by clicking a button like they can pay their electricity, phone bills online and
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 perform or manage their banking activities by sitting at home.
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 reduces their travelling costs due to which they do not meet any
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 individually as the need to to go other place does not arise due to latest
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. It is very important for individuals to
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 personally with each other because
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 will increase love between their relationships and they can
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 share their emotions and views more effectively which will bring them closer. According to my opinion,
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 are more social than in previous years because
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 brings them together with the help of new developments in the system. Some years ago, if a
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 has to make
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 with another
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 they have to go individually or send a letter to that
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 about the message which they want to convey to them.
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 was
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 time-consuming. But now
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 has changed they can make
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 with anyone or anywhere within a few seconds.
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