IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

#people #community #service #part #school #programmes #charity #neighborhood #sports #children
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Nowadays, a lot of young adults are interested in social service and are working as volunteers. A certain portion of people argues that free service is mandatory and should be part of their school curriculum. I would favour
this
Linking Words
 view and I contend that school children are obliged to do uncompensated
work
Use synonyms
 during their course
work
Use synonyms
. Admittedly, teenagers who do unrewarded
work
Use synonyms
 like teaching unprivileged primary school kids understand socio-economic inequalities.
For instance
Linking Words
, one of my friends who was from an affluent family never knew about children with meagre resources and was delighted to see the gratitude expressed by destitute students when they were taught English and other difficult subjects like Mathematics.
Therefore
Linking Words
, it is required to include unpaid community service as one of the subjects to inculcate good habits from childhood which aids them to grow into better citizens.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, they are a few adolescents who worked with local people as part of their studies and developed careers to resolve public issues. To illustrate, some of my classmates worked with farmers, listened and understood their issues with empathy and developed an application to solve their problems.
As a result
Linking Words
, they not only were able to solve farmers' issues
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 but
also
Linking Words
 grew as an entrepreneur generating revenue and providing employment opportunities.
Hence
Linking Words
, engraining moral values at an early age helps them to give back to society. To summarize, embedding social
work
Use synonyms
 as part of their studies not only benefits the individual, but
also
Linking Words
 the community.
This
Linking Words
 will assist them to understand the pain points of low-income individuals and aid in developing a sense of belongingness towards the nation.
Submitted by lakshmi.y15 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Topic Vocabulary:
    What to do next:
    Look at other essays: