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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are
people
 who give their whole lives to working only in one organisation.
However
, it is said by some part of a society, that a better choice is to
work
 for varieties of companies. In
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 I will look into both views and I will express my own opinion about
this
.
To begin
 with, lots of
people
 choose to stay at the same
place
 of
work
 for a
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log
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 time. The reason for
this
 could be that they are likely to stay in
thier
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their
 comfortable zones rather than to adjust to the changes all the time. But, when a person
work
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 in the same environment for a long period of time, they are likely to be more efficient at
work
 than a worker who
have
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 just come to
this
 company.
For instance
, my mom
have
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 been working at the same hospital for over twenty years and she is doing her job very quickly and efficiently. In comparison, new
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, who has come to that
place
 just a year ago,
she
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doen't
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doesn't
 know much about the
place
 and the stuff, so sometimes it can make her
work
 slower.
Thus
 ,it is clear, that "old" workers are used to the
place
 where they do their job,so they can be much
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quicker
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 than "new" ones. But, is it really good for a human to stay steadily
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the
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one
place
? The
second
 thought is that
people
 should vary the organisations they
work
 for.
Doing
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this
, we can learn many skills which can be very useful for us.
For example
, my aunt
have
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 changed a lot of places she worked
at
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and she has gained skills like managing to accustom to
new
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 environment, new
people
, she has become open-minded and aware of many
of
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ways of
handeling
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handling
a
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work
 and in the
end
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 she has opened her own company with
this
 knowledge.
Therefore
, we can
behefit
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benefit
 a lot from varying the organisations. In conclusion, there are
prons
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 and cons
in
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 both opinions.
However
, in my opinion, a better choice would be to
work
 for many organisations. In
this
 way, you can learn more and use
this
 knowledge for your own goals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Longevity
  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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