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Write about the following topic. To meet the growing needs of food for the increasing population, country should make use of edible insects as foods. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but affect negatively the nature too. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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With the steadily rising population, the issue of
food
 scarcity will be undeniable in the foreseeable future. It is important for us humans to look at alternative options available for
food
such
 as edible
insects
. There are many debates about the use of edible
insects
 as
food
 where there are several benefits and drawbacks in doing so. Having
insects
 as
food
 is not an unusual option as it sounds as there are already many countries in the world that
comsume
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consume
insects
 for
food
.
For instance
, Mexico, Africa, China and so on.
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The use
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 of edible
insects
 can be beneficial for a country as it would reduce consumption of other
food
 resources
such
 as
plant
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plants
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 and meat.
This
 can help a country preserve
it's
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its
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 resources for
future
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the future
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generation
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generations
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.
Moreover
,
insects
 contain
high
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a high
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 amount
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protein
protien
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of protien
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 and other nutrients which makes
it
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them
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 feasible as
alternative
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an alternative
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 choice of
food
. Along with
benefits
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the benefits
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 of eating
insects
 as
food
, there are some drawbacks
which
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that
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 make people hesitant to eat
it
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them
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. We are all aware that
insect
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insects
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 feed on decaying matter
such
rotten
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as rotten
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food
, animal corpses, human waste and so on,
this
 is
also
 one of the
reason
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reasons
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 why we want
insects
 at bay from our home.
Which
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This
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 is why having to eat
insects
 as
food
 can be quite daunting and can have harmful impacts
for
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on
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 our health. It may even carry parasites that are not only harmful but
also
 deadly.
Furthermore
, there is
possibility
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the possibility
a possibility
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 of allergy to people as there is little known about
it's
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its
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 reaction to our body.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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