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Some believe elderly people should live in nursing homes, others think they should live with the family members. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A number of individuals consider those old
people
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 should live in nursing houses while some communities believe that they should live with their children and their house.
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 essay will extend to analyse both views with my perspective. On the one hand, why do some human beings think that elders are spending their lives in nursing homes now in
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 modern era , their children have heretic schedules
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 To elaborate , they can not take care of their
parents
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 because of their competitive
life
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 . Everyone wants to achieve their goals during
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 they all forget their responsibilities about
families
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.
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 , a survey was conducted by BBC ( Broadcasting Board corporation) in 2017 revealed that in India 78% of elderly
people
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 have suffered from depression because their
families
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 do not have time for them .
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, most of the masses want to live their
parents
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 in nursing homes because they want to reduce their responsibilities.
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, older personalities are holding the best experience about
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 . To explain it, the grey-haired
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 have a lot of knowledge about every situation of
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 . They can better guide their younger family to getting a successful
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 so
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 why they are good impact to stay with their household.
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, a headline of the famous newspaper' The Moscow Times' was published in 2018 that a lot of
families
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 are living happy
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 dua to get experience from their
parents
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.
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, grey-haired individuals enhanced the knowledge of their younger
families
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. In conclusion,
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 in the advanced world
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 don't have time to take care of their
parents
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 yet grey individuals hold perfect knowledge about the
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 they can help their
families
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.I believe that I am in favour
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the latter notion.
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