Some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive or negative development? What is your opinion?

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In most schools around the world,
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have their own mobile
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. These devices play a role in safety, connectedness and learning for the
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.
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, in most schools, mobile
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are prohibited. In my opinion, there are benefits academically, socially and physically too.
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would require good attention and concentration in class in terms of learning and understanding. Having a mobile phone with them would impede the learning process in view of it being a distraction.
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, if the teacher is teaching at the whiteboard and
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are busy scrolling through their
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checking messages,
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evidently the student will be left behind in terms of understanding the subject. A complete ban on
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in class will allow them to have a better attention span. Social interaction among
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in school is crucial for their development. Having mobile
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would
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them to talk to each other in a more meaningful and active way
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of just connecting virtually through mobile
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. If schools would ban the use of mobile
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students
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would have to spend more time playing sports, games or chatting with their friends and have better communication and social skills. Screen time can
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be reduced and lead to better mental and physical wellbeing.
Although
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mobile
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have their disadvantages, they play an important role in
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’ safety. I strongly believe that their use in school should be limited or in some cases banned so that
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are able to learn better and strengthen friendships and engaged in healthier pursuits.
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