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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that volunteer
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such
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 as helping with charities and supporting younger kids with their studies should be compulsorily installed into high
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 experience, in my point of view, I agree with
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 statement completely.
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 and foremost, unpaid neighbourhood services teach juveniles to respect workers in their community, from which they understand the value of
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 and be grateful to social workers.
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, my high
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 used to organise planting events in our community in planting festivals. We learned how hard it is to plant a tree by digging a deep hole, stabilizing the roots and checking the mud ground by ourselves, after
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 an event we learned to appreciate the natural environment and the hard
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 of our gardeners. After all, experience is a better teacher compared to textbooks.
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, volunteer jobs assist teenagers in stepping into society to some extent, as they offer both
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 involvement and social communication to teenagers who bury themselves in study life. To be more specific, teenagers have few chances to experience the realm of social
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 while some of them face the situation of stepping into society directly after graduating from high
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.
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, volunteering in public services gives them a chance to practice,discover the problems around them and figure out possible solutions after that. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the proposal of pushing high
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 students into volunteering community services to teach them to be grateful and to prepare them for real society.
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