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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

#people #community #service #part #school #programmes #charity #neighborhood #sports #children
In
this
 modern times the issue of free
services
 like working for a Charitable trust, social work in
society
 giving education to poor children for games purposes should include in the social curriculum and make
it
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a mandatory rule.undoubtedly
this
 notion remains successful in keeping a majority in the favour.In the upcoming
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i
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 would shed an argument related to very conception. Generally speaking,
i
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I
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 totally agree with
this
 statement voluntary
services
 would definitely improve
child's
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a child's
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 personality. There is a wide
reasons
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 in favour of my argument.The most prominent one is developing overall thinking about
society
 by helping poor and needy children.in simple
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 the
students
 are aware of the reality,about certain sections,so that in near future. They can take care of them.Apart from it,
students
 will learn from teamwork,co-operation and develop kind nature.
for instance
,nowadays employers do not prefer only academic but
also
 looking for
such
 human qualities as well. To add a few more reasons how can one forget about
society
 can get benefits when
students
 are giving these kinds of
services
 to the
society
 like illiteracy is going to remove by them.To justify same there is an epitome of many underprivileged children got a chance in many sports as well as they become a sportsman just because of they got choosing from school
students
last
 but not the least Neighbourhood can be cleaned with these
services
 on a weekly basis. In conclusion, in my ,opinion these voluntary
services
 would bring the
students
 qualities better in every aspect as there is not any pleasable argument against the very phenomenon.

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