It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion

It is argued that social media, pop culture and contemporaries are the reason behind
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upbringing whereas others say family
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as the leading role. Outdoor activities
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a greater opportunity for a
child
to
expereince
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experience
and develop knowledge about the
mordern
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modern
world but if the circle is not good
this
could ruin the
child
's life. In my opinion, family's role has a big impact
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because they learn manners which are needed throughout their life.
To begin
,
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often loves
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going out
with friends in a pop
also
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media
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which indirectly provides them
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kind of knowledge and experience of the real outside world. They understand how things function through
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which gently helps them in growth and
development
. To cite an example, recently in the capital of
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after school half of the young population are found visiting dancing clubs, making new friends and uploading in a media as a source of
development
.
However
, I believe
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children
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are of exploring nature and if their friend circle is not good they may end up doing wrong illegal activities
such
as drug addiction, bullying
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other
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, etc.
Moreover
, home is always
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first
school
of
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a
child
to learn and grow.
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good
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are taught in a home which
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their mind beautifully. Parents
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in guiding the
child
which one is good and bad, motivating them in every
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. To illustrate,
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has found that children who are supported by their
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families
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have higher performances in their academic and career success. So,
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believe parents are the best well-wisher and
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in the
child
's
development
. In conclusion,
although
various means like social networking sites,
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pub show
pubs how
and schoolmates influence in the
child
growth that could be risky if the company
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they
that
have is bad.
However
, family is always the safest as it keeps the children under proper discipline,
thus
helping in the better growth and
development
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • development
  • media
  • pop culture
  • peers
  • family
  • social skills
  • beliefs
  • values
  • emotional support
  • moral guidance
  • aspirations
  • self-image
  • social development
  • value system
  • harmony
  • conflict
  • significant
  • behaviors
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