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You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter say how you feel about his performance give details of your musical activities explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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Dear sir,
Last
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 great time for me Because
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 attend music class I hope in
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 look like you . My name is XYX and recently I attended a concert and you give
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performance
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 hare in and sawing your activities me
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 much like your show and I feel good about It .
Me
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 join music class because
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 like music and I try to good in
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 am following you because you are
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one of the best people for me and I wish you help me
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 it because you have
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this
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 take some points for you about it . I hope you notice my message and
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 me soon and
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 sure you help me about
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 and give me any suggestions so please text me my number me
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 mention my number 578889. Your, Truly.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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  • stellar performance
  • captivating
  • musical prowess
  • talent
  • repertoire
  • collaboration
  • mentorship
  • resonate
  • aspiring musician
  • composition
  • rendition
  • inspirational
  • vocal range
  • harmonize
  • skillset
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