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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The chart represents information about the number of exports in a country in five different categories in the years 2015 and 2016, while the table illustrates the proportion of the
export
 changes in all categories in 2016. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the highest exported
products
 in 2015
was
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were
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 petroleum and the least
export
 number was
textiles
.
However
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textiles
 showed the most significant increase in
export
 in 2016 compared to four other
products
. Petroleum was exported about $60
billion
 in 2015 while was
textiles
 around $28
billion
 only.
Nevertheless
,
export
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 of
textiles
 saw a significant rise by 15.24% to almost 32
billion
 in the
next
 year, whereas
export
 of petroleum
products
 only inclined by about $10
billion
 in a year. The number of
export
 in engineered goods experienced an increase by 8.5% from $57
billion
 to approximately $61
billion
 between 2015 and 2016. While the agricultural
products
 that
exported
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 to other countries remained stable at around $32
billion
 in the year 2015 and 2016, Germ and jewellery showed a slight decrease by 5%.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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