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while some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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 modern-day, while many people believe that earth warming has become the most detrimental environmental problem, others think that the act of cutting
trees
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 is more serious to our world.
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, despite some negative
problems
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 of deforestation, I strongly argue that global warming is the most pressing issue at the moment. On the one hand, logging
trees
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 is one of the most concerning environmental issues as it has a negative impact on the air quality. As
trees
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 have a mechanism that allows them to absorb Oxygen and release Carbon dioxide, Thanks to that process we have Oxygen to maintain our life.
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, if we cut down
trees
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, there will be not any living air purifiers.
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, with the increasing rate of smoking released by industrial parks and vehicles each day, our air will not be safe and people might suffer from deadly breath illness and many will die.
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, the increase of global temperature could lead to the melting of permanent ices on the North and South poles. When the melting process begins, the sea level might rise significantly which can cause many natural disasters
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 as floods and hurricanes.
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, many cities or islands might disappear if they are below sea level.
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, our living space will shrink, while many big cities are facing the overpopulation issue.
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, many
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 can occur
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 as housing
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, shortage of food and fresh water, and even in order to expand living places they can cut down more
trees
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. To summarize, in
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 day and age, we have to deal with lots of environmental
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 including global warming and deforestation. In spite of having some devastating impacts, global warming is way more dangerous than cutting down tree issues, as it can lead to many issues that can negatively destroy our life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Greenhouse effect
  • Industrial emissions
  • Sea levels
  • Extreme weather events
  • Biodiversity
  • Carbon emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Paris Climate Accord
  • Carbon cycle
  • Soil erosion
  • Water cycles
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Reforestation
  • Sustainable forest management
  • Indigenous communities
  • Localized impacts
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