Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Numerous scientists think that children ought to be learned playing musical instruments. In my opinion, there are only benefits to
play
musical instruments.
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playing
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of all,the main reason Linking Words
in
playing Change preposition
for
on
different musical instruments can give us an amazing mood. Change preposition
apply
However
,not only playingLinking Words
in
a musical instrument can give us a good moodChange preposition
apply
,
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but ,
also
singing,listening to Linking Words
music
,dancing too. After school every child Use synonyms
have
to relax,they can relax only with Change the verb form
has
music
. They always enjoy doing it. In my own experience, my little sibling goes to an additional course to learn playing Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
apply
a
guitar and Correct article usage
the
singing
. I respect him,he Replace the word
sing
always
Add a missing verb
is always
buzy
,not lazy. Correct your spelling
busy
buys
All time
he does Add a hyphen
All-time
him
homework and Correct pronoun usage
his
learn
modern songs. Change the verb form
learns
In addition
,when I studied at school my Linking Words
favorite
lesson was Change the spelling
favourite
music
. In that lesson we could everything like singing, dancing, Use synonyms
learn
new songs and our teacher taught us to play in piano.She taught me to love Wrong verb form
learning
music
.
In conclusion, I totally agree with Use synonyms
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idea. Linking Words
Furthermore
, in Linking Words
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present-day
present
day everything is developing, especially Add an article
the present
a present
music
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subsequently
I would like to say Add a comma
,subsequently
parents
,that we must Change preposition
to parents
listen
our children, maybe they love playing Add the preposition
tolisten
in
a musical instrument, we can assist them to choose a profession . If they want to be Change preposition
apply
singer
or musician, Correct article usage
a singer
that is
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best
way to be richChange the article
the best
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