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give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.

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 table depicts the consumption in one year per person with two drinks in many different nations. It is clear from the graph that people
drink
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beer
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 more than fruit
juice
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 in these specific countries. According to what is shown, Ireland is more popular with
beer
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 by 155
litres
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 per person. While Austrians are in the
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 top of consuming the alcohol
drink
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 after Germans by more than 100
litres
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. The United Kingdom ranks almost in the middle in both tables while Australia and Finland
drink
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beer
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 89 and 79
litres
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 respectively, the Netherlands remained the same rank in both categories. New Zealand holds the least number of drinking fruit
juice
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 with 24.8
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 compared with the Canadians who almost consume half of the ratio. While Australia is in the 6th rank of consumption by 34.4 each year, almost 90% of the
juice
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 amount Australian
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 the alcohol
drink
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. To sum up, we could say that
beer
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 is most consumed by European countries. While fruit
juice
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 is most consumed by North American countries.
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