The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the development of modern technology and infrastructure, people can do shopping much easier through e-commerce.
However
,
although
some believe that online shopping can be replaced by destroying the high
street
shops
, I believe that the high streets
shops
are going to be
last
long for the three main reasons.
Firstly
, the prices we can get in the local
shops
is
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not much cost-effective and it can fall firmly in every buyer's budget range. While I concede that online shopping will have various discounts or vouchers going on all different seasons for their customers, the problem is buyers will not get the same range of benefits on every single product of their choice.
Moreover
, customers will not have to pay any delivery charges nor they should have to wait for the estimated delivery for the products if the
shops
from local stores, Another area of concern for net shopping is to shop without
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in person to show you the product specifications, While, the high
street
shops
will have the staff to assist you and
their
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to solve your quarries,
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if anyone is running short of knowledge for what they are purchasing
then
immediately they can get someone for their assistance and backup.
Finally
, my strongest argument is that it is good for the survival of
street
shops
, if we don’t buy their products and start giving
priorities
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to online purchasing
this
can lead to disaster for our local area
shops
.
Additionally
, if we
not
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stop buying from them it can help them in improving their standard of living and can earn a lot of benefits for shoppers. In conclusion. Online shopping is not only time consuming but
also
they cannot provide good quality of service.
Furthermore
, I acknowledge online shopping is easier and has various choices in them, I disagree that they can end high
street
shops
.
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