Some people suggest that international news should study as a subject in secondary school. However, others say that it will be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays, international
news
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getting more worldwide in the
world
and finding a human who is not aware of the recent events happening on the
otherside
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other side
of the
world
is getting harder. Some people have a positive attitude about
this
phenomenon and even argue it as a necessary subject to be taught in
secondry
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secondary
schools while others suggest it does not worth the time of students.
Although
being unaware of our
world
condition can be viewed as being
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illiterate
, I believe that students should not have
this
subject in their educational
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curriculum
. The essay will overlook both views which
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proceeding by my idea. On one hand, the mankind alliance and the effects that they can cause on each other is crystally clear.
For example
, consequences of a war in
other continent
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another continent
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definitly
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definitely
can affect the
youngsters
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lives not only in that continent but
also
around the
world
.
Therefore
, teaching the young generation about the reasons
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those changes and providing them
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necessary means to get ready for the
unprecedended
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unprecedented
future
can help them to deal with the probable similar situation in
future
.
Furthermore
, having a better understanding
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what is happening in the
world
opens their minds to help the vulnerable nationalities and save the integrity of humans.
On the other hand
, teenagers have always been viewed as the most sensitive group of society and the ones who are going to build the
future
of a country.
For instance
,
discribing
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describing
the daily worldwide
news
which mostly consists of bad
news
will affect a teenager's mental health much greater than an adult.
Consequently
, that
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will lose the most productive
years
of their lives to survive
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those negative effects.
Moreover
, as said above, these
years
are the most important period in their lives to be taught the subjects that are needed for construction a developed and successful community and
also
find their talents and improve them in order to be
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useful society member.
Thus
, nothing should get these fundamental
years
from them. To sum up, even though adding the international
news
to the
secondry
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secondary
school subjects can help the young generation to be more prepared for the
future
, I believe it will put them at
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great risk of being suffered from mental diseases and wastes their most important
years
to make their
future
careers.
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